Shawn’s Review

                The first thing that pops out at me from Shawn’s article is that it is very practical. The information that he provides in the article is something that is not often thought of. Many Americans I believe have some strange inherent distrust in the weather service that is well warranted to some extent. Shawn’s article does an excellent job of dispelling this feeling much more by showing his readers through a great deal of logos that the weather service is not as inaccurate as most people believe it to be.  There is a very big issue that I have with this paper and that is that it does not have any color. The topic is very engaging at first because everybody wants to know if the weather man really is just a dummy or not, but the paper needs more engaging content as it continues. I found that it became very hard to continue reading this paper because it is a lot of facts and a little bit of commentary on those facts. I would suggest maybe putting a few fun stories about the weather as it pertains to meteorology just to keep the reader interested. The most engaging things in this paper are some of the facts which is obviously a good tool, but the human element is nonexistent and it needs to be fixed to make a more engaging paper. Shawn did a very good job with his grammar and writing for a draft, there were no immediate errors that shot out at me it was. Overall it is a good paper with a strong base and as long as Shawn can find a way to add more color and put in a human element it will an be excellent paper worth reading.